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| Montana Norman |
Posted: 2007/10/29 9:30 Updated: 2007/10/29 9:30 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet   Joined: 2007/6/11 From: Dallas Texas Posts: 815 |
 Well.... It is hot... BUT... The last part of the line - that made me "LIKE" you so. ???
For me, it takes away from the passion. Difinitely devalues your gift........
The NEED of the other... The D E S I R E... One word... Can make this a great
poem! May I assume you are a beautiful woman? So, from my perspective, to "make"
you want another to take you- to have your gift... This is OUR PRIZE! For succeeding
to "SEDUCE" a beautiful woman...You.... Montana
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| az |
Posted: 2006/6/1 13:32 Updated: 2006/6/1 13:32 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2006/5/30 From: California Posts: 233 |
I liked it It is nice reading poetry. Yours is well written.
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| SnCrt9 |
Posted: 2006/3/31 15:51 Updated: 2006/3/31 15:51 |
Up and Comer   Joined: 2006/2/13 From: New Jersey Posts: 57 |
scotts parking lot like this poem. hope you continue to write it. make a part two.
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| genie |
Posted: 2006/3/30 17:20 Updated: 2006/3/30 17:20 |
Up and Comer Joined: 2006/2/20 From: Posts: 53 |
lust i like the scene, cold and hot.
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