lip gloss for whores! loved it. well done,

Great story, probably the best BDSM I've read here.

Can't wait to hear about the Motorcycle ride. I wonder if he has a vibrator that corresponds to the RPMs of the engine. The higher the RPMs the faster the vibration. Wouldn't THAT be a fun ride ... Great beginning frances!

What a turn on. so erotic. I'm looking forward to reading about the next training Faye will experience at the hands of her master.

I enjoyed being able to peek into what for me is uncharted territory. Very interesting reading, very well told!

Look at how many people who don't normally enjoy BDSM but have come to like your story. I think the key is in how you've poetically described your ma ster. He is comanding, forceful and perscribes pain but on the flip side h e shows softness, pleasure and true love. It's a balance and a trust that' s made the bond of your characters so enticing. Wonderful job, excellent, very classy! Thanks for all the effort you put into it, we all are benefit ing from it, can't wait for more.

i want more please

OMG I loved it soooo much. I loved how he kept bringing her to the brink of orgasms and how he made her beg to suck his cock. Wish it was me! U have a real talent for writing. Please keep up the good work!

sounds like you have a deep secret or fantasy lol well keep going fran. i like it very much. oh it defently gives me ideas??????????

Although bdsm isnt my scene, I found this to be well written and highly erotic.

BDSM not my cup of tea either (this is the first one I read), don't know how u do it, I did more than enjoy the story actually. Coming from u, my silly girl, I didn't expect less than a good one. Keep it up and don't let us wait to much for part 2. LT

HOT babe..did NOT know you had the side in you but you pulled it off awesome honey. Can't wait for more stories from you...three more words...i love ya..xxx

very descriptive, felt like I was right there, and am hoping that there will be a part 2.

I really enjoyed this story and I am not typically into bdsm it was good work and very descriptive in all the right ways

i loved your story almost as much as you.. i aint reall into the hurting thing i dont like hurting beautifull women but it was a good story..

i like the story it made me wet any way

What a great story! You have to have a part 2 to this.

such a hot story....what a turn on...mmmmm

All I can say is your a good writer and have a hot mind. I sure wish that I was the lucky guy in your story. Keep up the good work Fran.

sorry! i read the story all the way through. nicely written, but unfortunately did not do a thing for me in the way of turning me on. guess i'm definitely NOT interested in domination or pain. glad to see that you got a lot of comments and votes for your story, though. everyone has different tastes and likes/dislikes.... az

Holy crap!! That was HOT! Can't wait to see what happens next!

I have thought a little about this and you make me want to experience it. Frances, this is a very good story.

that was freakin awesome never read anything like it before but it definately aroused me

excellent story

I enjoyed reading it!

im left brethless!!! umm.. that was incredibly hot.. i could only dream of having that:)

Wow Fran!, a truely amazing story, never have i read a story that has made the BDSM scene sound so beautiful. Maybe i need to find someone to show me the ropes as it were.

After reading this story and the comments, it is interesting to see how many eyes it opened. The story is almosty like a textbook experience that show the real link between pleasure and pain. They are contraries, not contradictories. Frances was sharp enough to see that. Has "grab" in that it catches you up in it and you get to understand the psychology of the bittersweetness of real life as expressed in love play. The natural sequel I can think of I shouldn't say but I hope it comes soon so everyone can see it. It will surprise a lot of readers like this one did. Great job kid!

my god fran, that was one hot, hot, hot story! for one so shy in the chatroom, you can really let yourself go in a story! also for a first story, your efforts are amazing! you appear to be a seasoned writer to these well trained eyes! i hope to see the next story in this series published soon, along with many others. you have a real talent for getting me excited. well done on an excellent story! first of many i hope! your number one fan 12 x

Fran, You get my vote!!! its not someting I am into but you certainly raised my interest in a subject that has good and bad press! Great description of emotions and with a story that you can mould with each episode. Definately better than I could do. I cant wait to read the next episode or new subject story. Your friend Andy XX

Nice first story could use some work but, did not expect it to be as good as it was for your first story. If you want more experience of this lifestyle just ask me if you want hee.. hee..

I like this story, I enjoyed the Torture part of it

Wow Fran, what can I add to a story like you just authored. It was fantastic, well written, and very erotic, you made me grow another Inch reading your story. I sure hope you continue to write more like that. Was this a real life experience for you, or just an erotic fantasy. again bravo hon.

Frances, I loved this! Beautifully written. I love the tenderness that rises, pulses and entwines through the pain and dominance... A very subtle level of bdsm that appeals to those of us who are "on the fence" so to speak...

wow lol speechles i loved it very well writen. it kinda paints a picture in one head of the sitution. loved the ending as well. looking forward to any thing else you write.

Excllent story frances - difficult to find something new to say to the other comments of those who are not into to BDSM (as I am not) but, unlike one other person, I did not like the end - smacked (no pun intended) of "with one bound she was free" - smill But thank you frances

great story hun loved every word

hullo frannie baby.... Wow... whos been a busy little girl eh??? Im not a big fan of bdsm, but gotta admit... u got the old pulse going there... very nice and well done! Tall! x x x

well babe,what can i say but fucking excellent mmmmm girl,think i will go and buy duck tape,collar and leash hee! hee!my cock is raging for you now!!!!!!!!,well done honey

I especially liked the anticipation while Faye waited for him, wondering what it would be like. Oh, and I like the way He spoke to her. Good for you!

Great story, sure it was ur first? Cnt wait 4 more!

was it real for you???? or just a fantasy???? you make it sound like it happenened....this is a story ill come back to many times...

fucking great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow, I loved it. You have one very hot imagination....... or was it for real? oxoxoxo

cool story - the pace of it was right the build up in excitment was enjoyed by reader too

nice story fran i like how he teased her the entire time making her beg for it ...write moreeeeeeeeee lol lyl lol tia& spike

Very well done. Wish I could be dominated like that

You did very well, F. It polished up nicely and you have a gift for describing emotions. Congrats in order for a good friend! Lush

and more sweet. i want a master like that. i was fit to cum after that one. i likes ;)

suprised for your first story it was very good!!!

thats really hot frances, bdsm's not really my scene, but WOW

frances nice one you are a teaze faye is it or frances lol...looking forward to more good stuff from you. I like anticipation.....hmmmmmmmm

Excellent balance. The excitement is as it really was for me! And great language.

An amazingly good fucking story. I like the intensity of the anticipation and you have done an nice job of communicating her submissive feelings throughout the story. Well done and we look forward to an encore

This isn't the kind of story that I'd normally go looking for, but I am glad that i read it. It showed the gentler side of Bondage. And that's why I liked it. I also loved the ending, it immediately imagined the ride on the bike. Keep up the good work and as always LIVE LONG & PROSPER

to be honest, I am not sooo much into BDSM-stories, but I must say that this one did exite me very much and i am ow looking forward to read the next chapters, which will come, hopefully?!! The whole story has a very good "build-up" and follows it through to the end! I really loved to read it. Mandrin

I felt the emotion....I loved it!!!!

i feel all giddy...thanks for all the lovely comments...and for the votes...geez...

very hot work baby...and like the man says...no pain, no pain. wondering what other diversity you'll show next...and am aching to read more.

very very good. got me goin'!

it was a good story i liked it .

well now that uve made an exelent fitst one people are going to want to see more and i do too. keep up the good work.

Very good story I enjoyed it very much keep them coming

DAMN WOW that was intense....Im new to the power thing, but OMG that is like a dream come true now....it woke up a hidden fantasy of mine that i now need fulfilled! GREAT WORK!

I'm not normally into the power thing, but this worked. Very nice.

Frances, what a fantastic story. I'm not into the scene, but if it's like that maybe I should try. One great effort, for a first timer you deserve a prize.

great story Frances!! This is the first BDSM story I've ever read. If you keep writing them, it won't be the last!! Ray

hmm i cant wait for more from u huni r so good hmm:)