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| NaughtyFaye |
Posted: 2009/11/15 22:08 Updated: 2009/11/15 22:08 |
Up and Comer   Joined: 2009/6/29 From: Georgia, USA Posts: 41 |
 BEAUTIFUL ROSE! i literally felt like i was her!!!
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| kittykat24 |
Posted: 2008/12/27 1:50 Updated: 2008/12/27 1:50 |
Virgin   Joined: 2008/1/3 From: earth Posts: 2 |
HOT!! GREAT STORY!! That was simply beautiful
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| firey_lover |
Posted: 2008/12/20 17:08 Updated: 2008/12/20 17:08 |
Bookworm   Joined: 2007/10/24 From: California Posts: 75 |
*ahem* That was simply amazing. I really enjoyed how you were mixing Spanish into it,
I haven't seen another story that does that although perhaps I simply wasn't
looking in the right places. I really loved the line "hated to love" it's such
a truly wonderful description.
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| Jonathan_Philips |
Posted: 2008/12/18 10:51 Updated: 2008/12/18 10:51 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet   Joined: 2006/2/3 From: London UK Posts: 3010 |
Well done! A wonderful piece of erotica.
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| red rose |
Posted: 2008/12/10 7:17 Updated: 2008/12/10 7:17 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2007/6/27 From: Posts: 1670 |
Well Done.. Loved the story RRR, well deserved story of the month... & Good luck with the
story of the year contest...I've realised after reading this, not only do we
have similar names, but we have similar writing styles too, a collaboration would
be good on a story, but I may contemplate changing my nick..too many people get
us confused as it is, on the forums & chat, now it seems on the stories too,
judging by a couple of comments left on here. Which isn't fair to you or me,
we need our own identity hey. I'm sure it must guile you sometimes when people
think your the cheeky scouse bird lol. Anyways great story, loved the descriptions
& you made the visual easy...well done again xxx
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| brownsugar72 |
Posted: 2008/12/7 0:57 Updated: 2008/12/7 0:57 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet Joined: 2007/2/23 From: New York City Posts: 293 |
Loved It This story really took me places. Thanks for the great writing. Ignore all petty
criticisms. The majority loves your work.
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| lovejoy |
Posted: 2008/11/23 12:00 Updated: 2008/11/23 12:00 |
Virgin  Joined: 2006/12/30 From: Lady Jane Felsham,s place Posts: 14 |
Good work My Scouse Man u hating friend
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| george formby |
Posted: 2008/11/23 11:53 Updated: 2008/11/23 11:53 |
Virgin Joined: 2008/11/16 From: Posts: 3 |
Turned out nice again Nice work Rose
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| Pearl1113 |
Posted: 2008/11/22 13:40 Updated: 2008/11/22 13:40 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2008/9/3 From: Posts: 363 |
redred!!! awesome story!! i enjoted it very much! very good girl and very well-deserved
story of the week! anytime u need help with ur spanish phrases, let me know!
ill be glad to help... :D (traviesa chica, should be chica traviesa...) but it
was great!!! mwa!!
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| baby |
Posted: 2008/11/21 23:01 Updated: 2008/11/21 23:01 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2007/5/11 From: Posts: 4432 |
Nice piece...him and the story! I love this...we tipped over into that velvety darkness together. Great job!
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| PorchLightOn |
Posted: 2008/11/20 17:23 Updated: 2008/11/20 17:23 |
Up and Comer  Joined: 2007/4/11 From: Between seasons Posts: 61 |
Feel the summer heat Exceptionally well-written story, congrats. Vivid descriptions - I could taste
the wine and feel the night. Love the way you moved from inside, to outside,
to the cab and then home. Write on!
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| Luv2 |
Posted: 2008/11/20 9:41 Updated: 2008/11/20 9:43 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2007/4/7 From: Luv2... Loves hugging his Jeannie! Posts: 5309 |
Re: Story Correcting > Lucky? ............ Story> I'm sorry but I stopped reading half
way though. I am no writer by anymeans, but I could not get past the "as" and
"was" used in every other sentence. I think the story had the potentential to
be great. Try eliminating the usage of as, was, and other words repeating 'TOO'
much. What I did read of the story line I liked, other 'THAN' the repeating of
annoying words over and over. Keep up the '???' work, your imagination Rocks.
Lucks (What kind of work Lucks???)
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| Luv2 |
Posted: 2008/11/20 9:33 Updated: 2008/11/20 9:34 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet Joined: 2007/4/7 From: Luv2... Loves hugging his Jeannie! Posts: 5309 |
Rose Rocks !! Very hot and passionate Rose! Ignore what 'Lucky mumbled'. She was just pissed,
because nobody was getting 'Slapped Around!' I'll have to go check her profile
and see if she has any stories? They are probably perfect though? :)(: Great
job Rose! Made my 'Willie' tingle! :) Thanks and '3 pts' ...... Luv2
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| redredrose |
Posted: 2008/11/20 9:21 Updated: 2008/11/20 9:21 |
Up and Comer  Joined: 2007/3/7 From: Vienna, Austria... where they sell Erotica from street stalls! Posts: 44 |
Re: Story Thanks to all who have voted and commented, very much appreciated! :) Glad you
liked the story. Lucks - thanks for the constructive criticism! :) I know I also
have a tendency to use 'that' and 'which' too much as well; I'll work on improving
these problems. Rose xxx
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| luckykissx5 |
Posted: 2008/11/19 21:09 Updated: 2008/11/19 21:20 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2007/3/3 From: Some Girls are Just Born Lucky Posts: 1691 |
Story I'm sorry but I stopped reading half way though. I am no writer by anymeans,
but I could not get past the "as" and "was" used in every other sentence. I think
the story had the potentential to be great. Try eliminating the usage of as,
was, and other words repeating to much. What I did read of the story line I liked,
other then the repeating of annoying words over and over. Keep up the work, your
imagination Rocks. Lucks
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| freddyair |
Posted: 2008/11/19 2:43 Updated: 2008/11/19 2:43 |
Chat Moderator  Joined: 2007/2/26 From: Near Boston Posts: 3146 |
Whew! I'm wiping my brow... I love your description and attention to detail. ...and
it was a great romp from place to place to place. Thanks for the fun. =f=
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| Miss Bee |
Posted: 2008/11/17 18:54 Updated: 2008/11/17 18:54 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2007/4/22 From: Buzzing about...here, there and everywhere Posts: 878 |
Santo Cielo! A very well deserved 'Story of the Week', redred. Ths one phrase brought the
whole thing together for me: 'tipped over into that velvety darkness together...'
- pure poetry! Bee xx
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| stillpure |
Posted: 2008/11/17 17:59 Updated: 2008/11/17 17:59 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2008/1/12 From: NY Posts: 5918 |
..... Wow...That was incredible. Ultimately lusty, but not so much that it's devoid
fo emotion. You get that very passionate feeling when you read this.
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| tail gunner |
Posted: 2008/11/17 15:19 Updated: 2008/11/17 15:19 |
Lusty Librarian's Pet  Joined: 2008/6/28 From: the great American southland Posts: 1139 |
it' s all in the details! a great job, Triple-R !! ... i especially liked the way you had your characters
take each other' s cothes off! ... the detail !! ... i could see it! ... it stoked
the flames of my voyeur passions. ... i LOVE writers! ... you are one !
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| so-nicely |
Posted: 2008/11/17 13:24 Updated: 2008/11/17 13:24 |
Virgin Joined: 2008/10/13 From: Emerald City Posts: 8 |
Bravo!!! I know how much I liked reading it, Redredrose, but oh my... knowing how much
you enjoyed writing it, that pleasure, is exactly what I'd love to share with
you....
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| LaPrincesa |
Posted: 2008/11/17 3:10 Updated: 2008/11/17 3:10 |
Bookworm  Joined: 2008/1/31 From: (clap clap clap clap) Deep in the Heart of Texas Posts: 86 |
Jiminey Cricket Rose! That was brilliant! i loved it!
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| BIGFluffy09 |
Posted: 2008/11/17 1:42 Updated: 2008/11/17 1:42 |
Up and Comer Joined: 2007/8/21 From: Posts: 55 |
Dear God that was THE definition of lusty! GREAT work!
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