i literally felt like i was her!!!

GREAT STORY!! That was simply beautiful

That was simply amazing. I really enjoyed how you were mixing Spanish into it, I haven't seen another story that does that although perhaps I simply wasn't looking in the right places. I really loved the line "hated to love" it's such a truly wonderful description.

A wonderful piece of erotica.

Loved the story RRR, well deserved story of the month... & Good luck with the story of the year contest...I've realised after reading this, not only do we have similar names, but we have similar writing styles too, a collaboration would be good on a story, but I may contemplate changing my nick..too many people get us confused as it is, on the forums & chat, now it seems on the stories too, judging by a couple of comments left on here. Which isn't fair to you or me, we need our own identity hey. I'm sure it must guile you sometimes when people think your the cheeky scouse bird lol. Anyways great story, loved the descriptions & you made the visual easy...well done again xxx

This story really took me places. Thanks for the great writing. Ignore all petty criticisms. The majority loves your work.

My Scouse Man u hating friend

Nice work Rose

awesome story!! i enjoted it very much! very good girl and very well-deserved story of the week! anytime u need help with ur spanish phrases, let me know! ill be glad to help... :D (traviesa chica, should be chica traviesa...) but it was great!!! mwa!!

I love this...we tipped over into that velvety darkness together. Great job!

Exceptionally well-written story, congrats. Vivid descriptions - I could taste the wine and feel the night. Love the way you moved from inside, to outside, to the cab and then home. Write on!

Correcting > Lucky? ............ Story> I'm sorry but I stopped reading half way though. I am no writer by anymeans, but I could not get past the "as" and "was" used in every other sentence. I think the story had the potentential to be great. Try eliminating the usage of as, was, and other words repeating 'TOO' much. What I did read of the story line I liked, other 'THAN' the repeating of annoying words over and over. Keep up the '???' work, your imagination Rocks. Lucks (What kind of work Lucks???)

Very hot and passionate Rose! Ignore what 'Lucky mumbled'. She was just pissed, because nobody was getting 'Slapped Around!' I'll have to go check her profile and see if she has any stories? They are probably perfect though? :)(: Great job Rose! Made my 'Willie' tingle! :) Thanks and '3 pts' ...... Luv2

Thanks to all who have voted and commented, very much appreciated! :) Glad you liked the story. Lucks - thanks for the constructive criticism! :) I know I also have a tendency to use 'that' and 'which' too much as well; I'll work on improving these problems. Rose xxx

I'm sorry but I stopped reading half way though. I am no writer by anymeans, but I could not get past the "as" and "was" used in every other sentence. I think the story had the potentential to be great. Try eliminating the usage of as, was, and other words repeating to much. What I did read of the story line I liked, other then the repeating of annoying words over and over. Keep up the work, your imagination Rocks. Lucks

I'm wiping my brow... I love your description and attention to detail. ...and it was a great romp from place to place to place. Thanks for the fun. =f=

A very well deserved 'Story of the Week', redred. Ths one phrase brought the whole thing together for me: 'tipped over into that velvety darkness together...' - pure poetry! Bee xx

Wow...That was incredible. Ultimately lusty, but not so much that it's devoid fo emotion. You get that very passionate feeling when you read this.

a great job, Triple-R !! ... i especially liked the way you had your characters take each other' s cothes off! ... the detail !! ... i could see it! ... it stoked the flames of my voyeur passions. ... i LOVE writers! ... you are one !

I know how much I liked reading it, Redredrose, but oh my... knowing how much you enjoyed writing it, that pleasure, is exactly what I'd love to share with you....

That was brilliant! i loved it!

that was THE definition of lusty! GREAT work!