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  Oldsmobile Dream Machine 

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Author: sensuousacumen  Published: 9/22/2008  story views: 118260
 


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I was late. I pushed through the door to the service station and stifled a yawn as it tinkled back into its frame. Darla, my coworker, was chomping gum and staring like a caged animal.

“So?” she hounded.

I rolled my eyes. “What?”

“What happened?” she bubbled.

“What happened when?”

The sky was creeping blue with the sun setting below the horizon.

“What happened with that guy?”

I shuffled around the counter and clocked in. “Nothing happened, D, nothing.”

“Oh, yeah, sure.”

It was probably the second ‘nothing’ that gave me away. Or the bags under my eyes and my rumpled uniform. “Later.” Inventory awaited.

Nothing. Ha! So here’s what did happen. Right… My name Is Anitchka. Twenty-two and full of spunk, or what passes for it. I don’t care if you think that’s a cool name, I think it’s stupid. I go by Annie. I’m 5’ 6”, skinny, and don’t you dare ask how much I weigh. Descent-wise I’m white, but Italian, Native American and Japanese as well. Crazy family, don’t ask. My shapely bumps aren’t big, but firm and sexy enough even for me to appreciate when I roll out of bed in the morning. Well, late in the morning. I live out in the middle of nowhere, New Mexico, in a town near the highway, and I work nights at the Oasis Service Station. It’s a peeling, wooden, red-striped and white box that shimmers for miles down the highway; two dirty-paned garage doors the only evidence it ever did have full service. At three in the morning, when I get off, it’s an island of fluorescent light in an ocean of black darkness. Last night, a night like all the others, brought the same parade of truckers, travelers and assorted denizens of the late-night highway. They rolled in out of the gloom on twin points of yellow light, made their purchases and fill-ups, and rolled away. It wasn’t a particularly busy night, but a decent one. Phil, the owner, would be happy. I was watching the front drawer for Darla. Only a handful of wrinkled bills had crossed the counter in the twenty minutes since she had gone to clean the bathrooms, and that was five minutes after the end of my shift. I finished with my last customer as she appeared out of the shelves, trailing the bucket and mop behind her.

“Sorry,” she mouthed, eying the clock.

I checked out, dropped my hat in my locker, grabbed my jacket and headed out the door. It had hardly chimed shut when across the sky came the deep rumble of desert thunder. Searing white gnarled cracks pierced the sky before the bass cannons of storm rumbled again.

Smoothly out of the murk glided two dimmed yellow bulbs attached to the most beautiful creation on four wheels. Oxidized crimson and cream, cracked tan seats, an old windshield with a blue top border, and chrome trim and hubs painted the patina of heat and sun. It was perfect. I love old cars. Don’t know the first thing about them, but they quite simply do it for me. It rolled up to the pump and out stepped a most appropriate pilot to that handsome machine. About my age, in a clean ribbed t-shirt and dirty ripped jeans, he was all broad shoulders and trim muscle. Catching my stare, he subtly altered his course over to me.

“Hi!” he said.

“Hey,” I said timidly. “What kind of car is that?”

“This?” he said. “This is a ’63 Oldsmobile F-85. Original paint. She needs some work, but pretty nice, huh?”

“Yeah.” Great reply, ol’ Anne. If I didn’t start sounding smarter than a potted plant I was going to burst out red all over.

“It’s what I do. Fix up old beauties and sell ‘em. Not much money in it, but I enjoy it. Just got this one, earlier today. Taking it back. You like it?”

“Oh, yeah.”

“Yeah, she might just be a keeper.” He smiled and walked off into the store.

I berated myself for being as dull as a bump on a log and not trying harder to win him over. I dropped it and started to my car. I could see the great-looking stranger talking animatedly to Darla. Around the corner, I unlocked my car and jumped in, and turned the key. The starter produced a noise rather like a mechanical crow laughing. Great. Dead. Aggravated, I got out and slammed the door. I reached for the hood clasp. As I checked the engine, more thunder pounded the desert floor, blue light dancing weird shadows over everything. Nothing was wrong with the engine; it had to be a dead battery. As I slammed the hood down in whispered profanity, one light crisp crack of thunder sounded and the sky opened up. Gawking at the black night and cursing fate, I was surprised by a familiar voice.

“Need a ride?” God, even face screwed up against the rain and shivering off droplets, he looked good as could be.

“Yeah, dead battery.”

“Well, c’mon.” He walked me to the dream machine and away we went, rain drumming on the steel roof. “Chet.” He extended his hand.

“Anitchka.” I shook it.

“Your name tag says ‘Annie.’”

“Yeah, I go by Annie.”

“Cool, right on.” Now, I know the smell old upholstery gets is technically called decay, but between the musk of the car and this boy’s sweat and engine grease, I was whirling in pheromonal paradise. “Where to?”

“Oh, just a little ways south to a county road.” My voice cracked, betraying my titillation. It was longer than a little ways and would be even longer with awkwardness like this. I just closed my eyes and enjoyed the ride.


“This one?” He asked. I rose from my daze.

“I can’t tell. What’s the road number?” All these turnoffs looked the same, especially at night.

“I’m not sure, I can hardly see it. It’s really coming down.” And it was. He slowed to the sign and rolled down the window. Mud was running in rivulets off the dirt road. “32,” he said.

“No, I’m off 34.”

“Right.”

“Sorry to take you this far out of the way.”

He looked over and our eyes met. “No, I don’t mind.” We held for just a little too long for discretion. “I’m not too far off my route anyway.”

Half a mile down the route, the rain was only intensifying. The smell and the noise on the roof were amazing; I was lost in the experience. My attractive driver, though, was slowing more and more.

“This is too intense. I can’t see anything. We have to pull off before I drive into a ditch. Sorry.”

“Oh, I don’t mind.” He pulled off and the engine died with a sputter. He set his seat back, and I copied him, a hiding a smirk on my face. He cleared his throat and we shared an awkward silence.

“So-’’ we both began.

“Sorry. You go ahead-’’

“No, you,” he said.

“Um, I like your car.”

“Yeah, it’s nice.”

My heart was pounding. I was never good at this.

“Annie,” he said, shattering my withdrawn world in the dark. I caught his gaze and he suddenly leaned over, inches face to face.

After a moment of soul gazing, I tried to say, “Che-’’ as he kissed me deep and long, before pulling back.

“You’re beautiful” is all he said.

My eyes must have been dilating as if under a narcotic, as his were furrowed in contentment. I grabbed him and pulled him into me, kissing like crazy and crushing his lips. He fumbled and half fell across the console onto me, never missing a beat. Adrenaline-filled seconds turned into euphoric minutes, then melted away into a blur. After some time, he kissed down the side of my mouth, under my chin and down my neck. I was almost spasming with pleasure. He chased down the split in my shirt as far as it would let him, hands slipping under the shirt, caressing my hips. Almost as an afterthought, he stopped, suddenly, and we snapped into gaze and I held there for fleeting seconds, seeing the burn of desire in his eyes. My neck was flushed. My skin was moist. My jeans had ridden up from me grinding the air; my panties were soaked. It was black as pitch outside, the rain continued to hammer the roof.

I needed this. I wanted it so bad - I needed him. I dug my hand into his crotch, lifted his shirt with the other, and started passionate, wet kisses down his rippled torso. I had only gotten to sucking at his waistline, his hard member in my hand, when he firmly placed his hand on my collarbone and gently said, “No.” He put his arms under mine and quickly lifted me, then plowed between the seats into the cavernous backseat, gently setting me down, center on the bench seat, and kneeled. Removing his shirt, he crouched down. He popped the button on my jeans, and peeled apart the zipper. Sliding his thumbs, he hooked and stripped my pants and panties in one fell swoop. My cheeks rested on the soft cushion, my ankles dangling against the fake leather edge, legs spread. My just-shed clothing disappeared into the front seat. Lifting my legs, my new gorgeous lover, my cosmic crush, started kissing down to my slicked, fiery nethers. I started moaning, quietly keening like an animal. Reaching ground zero, he lifted and separated my legs further, rotating my hips up and out. His tongue lifted, split, and dived past my wet lips, digging hard into me then searching down, circling; down and around to my wet hole. I moaned and gasped so loud, legs twitching furiously. He circled his tongue and dived in, out and in again. He raced up, cupped my clit and sucked it hard.

This beautiful boy was generous, and he knew what he was doing. My mind swirled and swooned, crested and zoomed, through the licking and sucking and rubbing he gave. In a trance, I didn’t notice him moving south until his tongue touched and wet my anus. My eyes shot open and I jerked. Holding me firmly, he persisted. I relaxed and resumed twitching with the thrill and intense pleasure of this new and entirely foreign experience. Eventually, he made the return trip back up, to take me again into madness. Finally, eons later, he flicked my clit in what I’m sure was a blur, my legs started bucking, and my eyes exploded in white and blue fireworks as I spasmed through the most intense and amazing orgasm I ever had. At least so far.

He let go of my legs and they collapsed, me muttering and twitching in a euphoric daze. He turned over, released the passenger seat forward, dropped trou and braced against the back of the seat. I took over guiding his swollen, very surprisingly huge member up to me. As he slid in, I realized just how big he was. And, it had been awhile. I panicked, and my muscles clamped down, but he pushed through unnoticed. My pain turned into aching pleasure, and I relaxed, letting him in deeper. He backed off, then pushed in again, resting deep against my cervix.

“Do you want me to go easy?” he asked.

Gasping, I said, “No, fuck me.” He pushed in deeper and my voice went high pitched, as I cried desperately, “Fuck me; fuck me, hard.”

And did he. He started pounding the shit out of me, so deep and big, I had never had anyone so big. My muscles clamped, involuntarily, and he pounded me, harder and harder. The car was groaning, the seat was squeaking, and he was smashing my cervix, when, suddenly, it gave and he slipped through, into me deeper than anyone or anything ever before. I grabbed his firm butt, pulled him in slowly, painfully deeper, my cervix squashing down helplessly on his rock hard meat. I growled an animal cry, and he started pounding me again, defeating my cervix, opening it up on every stroke. My legs locked around him and I cried out long, long and hard, holding him in a death grip, as a locked-up flood, an amazing, long-overdue orgasm rocked me, him, the car, and space and time. I kept crying out, bucking into his every stroke, loving the feel of it all, my dancing breasts, the springs digging into my ass, my sticky gush squirting out all around his piledriving member, the amazing, liberating release. We just held there, rocking in the squeaking car, that beautiful car, the sweat and smell filling the air. Eventually he cleared his throat and pulled out, huge, not having come yet. My muscles seemed all locked up. He zipped up loosely and pulled me over into his lap.

We lay there panting, and just simply experiencing. Ah, the afterglow. I was sore. Very sore, and very happy. I saw my pants crumpled on the console, leaned over and reached into the pocket.

“Do you mind?” I mumbled.

“No, go ahead.”

I lit the smoke and leaned back into my lover’s warm embrace. The smoke wafted across the ceiling. I reached back and rolled down the window. The smell of wet desert flora and rain greeted me. The downpour had ceded to a slight drizzle, long had visibility been enough to drive. I put out the smoke in the backseat console, and his arm interrupted me. Pinching at my inner thigh, his thumb nuzzled my swollen button. Getting a fiendishly sinful idea, I swatted him away and flipped over, a devilish mood overcoming me. On my elbows, I stripped down his jeans, already unbuttoned, and dove for it. My lonely, celibate existence had been shattered by this beautiful boy and his bounty of wondrous orgasms, and I wanted to make tonight even more awesome. Sucking and licking his balls, I worked my way up his shaft, licking and biting. I hadn’t done this much, but I gave it my all. I’m proud that I was able to swallow him all, lips resting on his balls, even if it hurt and I had to do everything to fight my gag reflex. His member swelled even bigger, filling my mouth and jamming my throat. I bobbed my head up and down, sucking hard and banging the inside of my throat, over and over, knowing it would hurt now and a lot later. I even started getting a taste for the pain. Getting tired and very sore, I stopped when I feared he was near orgasm. I slipped off and sucked him clean, then mounted the back seat, ass in the air, my head literally crammed into the back window. It was a great view, I’m sure. I had sympathy for his position while giving me my lickins’ earlier. But I wanted to do this. Getting behind me, cramped, he guided his raging cock to my pussy.

“Mmm-mm,” I murmured and again I took over. Rubbing his cock in my slit, getting it wet, adrenaline filled me, and fear made me doubt if I really wanted to do this. I slowly slipped his rod back, surprising him, and guided it up to my anus. His experimentation earlier had given me newfound sexual inspiration. I hoped.

“Are you sure?” He paused.

“Yeah. Uh, yeah, do it.”

He grabbed my hips and pushed. Rollercoaster fear and nausea filled my body as the fiery, filling pain and pressure overtook me. I cried in pain, and he stopped.

“Really?”

I didn’t feel really, but deep down I loved this, pain and all. “Yes. Do it!”

He pushed in hard and started fucking me, fucking me hard in the ass. The pain was overwhelming. I swooned and collapsed against the seat, head swirling. Oh god, did it hurt. Screaming in pain, clenching the seat with dug in fingernails, I was loving it. I slowly relaxed, and found it was less painful that way.

My pain-filled cries changed to animal growls. “Fuck me! Fuck me! Fuck me… HARDER!”

Yes, harder, so hard. I was hurting, moaning, and very much enjoying. So was he apparently; grunting and keening, he seemed close to cumming. Always the gentleman though, even in this, he moved one hand around my hip and started grinding my clit. Too much sensation, I started bucking. Ramming myself into him, pushing him deeper. I felt so much pleasure from this. Suddenly I felt close to cumming too. The feeling seemed to crest, then came again and took me, both of us orgasming simultaneously. Suddenly it hurt bad, and I pushed him out even as I was cumming and gushing still. We settled, just rested, panting in the darkness. After a few minutes, I rose and exited out the back door, nothing but the dark, damp miles of desert around us. Both of us, him naked from the waist up, me naked from the waist down, slowly waddled to our respective doors and got in. He put on his shirt and I my pants. We kissed again for a while, and he started the car. The thundering roar was a wake-up call back to reality. I lit a smoke and we rolled quietly down the dark road. Noticing a flash in the sky, suddenly there were dozens of meteors cascading down, over and over. They never seemed to stop.

“How about that,” he quietly remarked. The sun started coming up as we turned down my road. It was the last I saw of the meteors. He found my house, and as I exited and headed for the dark structure, he called, “Will I see you again?”

I just smiled and said, “Well, you always know where I work!”

The last I saw was that red-and-white rocket and that beautiful boy bathed in orange sunrise, pulling away. I went inside and crashed. I was tired, bruised, sore in many ways, and blissfully satisfied. I was uncertain and queasy about the last part of what we did, but I was pretty sure I liked it. I hurt with how hard he’d fucked me, and it felt good. I fell asleep with a smile on my face. I awoke to the early evening, and the alarm squawking away, as it had been for a while. I cursed and hurriedly got dressed, mussed my hair, and headed out the door, the beautiful stranger still on my mind. I was late.

***

This is a first story. Please critique and send me some feedback. Thx, sensousacumen
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sweetdesires22
Posted: 2009/11/10 2:05  Updated: 2009/11/10 2:05
Virgin
Joined: 2009/9/8
From: California
Posts: 2
 Incredible
That was so hot, it had me pulsing all over. Such an amazing dialogue-the sparks between the two were tantalizing. Looking forward to reading more of your work!
Wabbit
Posted: 2009/9/16 16:03  Updated: 2009/9/16 16:03
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2007/1/23
From: In the shadows
Posts: 1098
 Fantastic...
Great story..How I just now sat down to read it is beyond me. Well written and just fabulous. Old cars do it for me too..as do men that work on them. Something about it...mmmm. Thanks for sharing this wonderful tale.
wanderer49
Posted: 2009/9/6 7:39  Updated: 2009/9/6 7:39
Virgin
Joined: 2009/6/15
From:
Posts: 16
 Sensational
Great story well told. 3 votes from me.
followdarabbit
Posted: 2009/8/4 19:39  Updated: 2009/8/4 19:39
Virgin
Joined: 2007/6/22
From: N.Y.
Posts: 15
 nice
that was hot
JJ Forever
Posted: 2009/7/15 18:42  Updated: 2009/7/15 18:42
Virgin
Joined: 2009/7/12
From: Oregon
Posts: 11
 Incredible!!!
What an amazing story, and your first as well!! Congrats on Story Of The Year too! Your story was so vivid and detailed, and your words were powerful. Your characters were lifelike, and seemed to react realisticly to their sexual situations. I can't find a single thing I could critisize on. Well written just doesn't cut it. Bravo.
happyface
Posted: 2009/6/21 23:22  Updated: 2009/6/21 23:22
Virgin
Joined: 2009/6/19
From: california
Posts: 3
 oh my fuck
Amazing!
XxmaggotchickxX
Posted: 2009/4/6 16:13  Updated: 2009/4/6 16:13
Flirt
Joined: 2009/3/14
From: My little black and green room
Posts: 23
 wow
That was amazing meeting someone like that and then having a amazing night. Please make another and I didn't really find anything wrong with the story.
Ginger54
Posted: 2009/3/17 6:15  Updated: 2009/3/17 6:15
Flirt
Joined: 2006/11/17
From: Colorado, U.S.
Posts: 22
 very well written
I just wanted to say that your story was one of the best I have read on LL. It was sensual without being crude, and I agree ten-fold that you should consider writing a seuqal. Congrats on your first story, and congrants on winning the story of the year!
Juniper Wren
Posted: 2009/2/19 1:40  Updated: 2009/2/19 1:40
Virgin
Joined: 2009/1/20
From:
Posts: 1
 Best Story Ever.
This is the best story I've ever read on here. You've got enough build-up to put the reader in the story, but it isn't long-winded. It's so erotic. I have read it with results many times in the last couple months. Continues to be my favorite. I hope you keep writing; I think your writing is publish-worthy.
shazzy
Posted: 2009/1/29 15:08  Updated: 2009/1/29 15:08
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2006/6/7
From:
Posts: 3447
 Truly
exceptional, congrats and very well done to one of the best stories around by far
javasnob
Posted: 2009/1/27 15:30  Updated: 2009/1/27 15:30
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2009/1/24
From: wherever you want me to be
Posts: 1249
 Olds Dream
Truly hot! More, please!
Meia
Posted: 2009/1/19 1:08  Updated: 2009/1/19 1:08
Virgin
Joined: 2008/2/12
From:
Posts: 11
 Woah!!
Your FIRST story?! It was BRILLIANT!!
SecretLick
Posted: 2009/1/17 20:43  Updated: 2009/1/17 20:43
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/7/13
From: Midwest
Posts: 1463
 Congrats
That was like a real life story that people only dream about. It was so well written and you used such powerful words to describe what was happening.. Congrats again .. xoxo Jen
Iwantitall
Posted: 2009/1/14 0:31  Updated: 2009/1/14 0:31
Virgin
Joined: 2008/12/9
From: Midwest
Posts: 18
 Delicious
Raw...hot...lusty. I loved it. As stated....you are a natural. Ready for more. Thanks for sharing and congrats on story of the year!!
Anonymous
Posted: 2009/1/11 15:13  Updated: 2009/1/11 15:13
 Speechless...
Holy shit that was hot. No wonder it was story of the year. Amazing read. Wow... Can't think of anything that would have made it more of a scorcher. I'm in awe.
brownsugar72
Posted: 2009/1/8 0:55  Updated: 2009/1/8 0:55
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2007/2/23
From: New York City
Posts: 293
 Hurts So Good
Wow, must have more. Please write a sequel. This hot couple has to get together again. Great first story!
DirtyLittleGirl
Posted: 2009/1/2 23:30  Updated: 2009/1/2 23:32
Virgin
Joined: 2008/10/30
From: Tied up to a bedpost
Posts: 4
 :-)
...great story!
red rose
Posted: 2009/1/1 10:15  Updated: 2009/1/1 10:15
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2007/6/27
From:
Posts: 1670
 Congratulations on Story of the Month...
The way you described the setting, the weather, the car everything was both refreshing & unique to any story I have read so far on the LL...You obviously have a talent for writing, as this is your first story, simply, but beautifully told...and yes it did work, even tho she had only just met the guy, some people do take the moment if it feels right. Congratulations on story of the Year, I hope this inspires you to write more for all of us to read. x
Anonymous
Posted: 2008/12/31 10:58  Updated: 2008/12/31 10:58
 Congratulations
Congratulations on Story of the Year. First time is definitely a charm. No critique is needed. This is a very well written story, great plot and character development. Some may question why she got in his car so quickly, but given the circumstances I think it was appropriate, and worked well within the story. Great job!
redredrose
Posted: 2008/12/30 14:01  Updated: 2008/12/30 14:01
Up and Comer
Joined: 2007/3/7
From: Vienna, Austria... where they sell Erotica from street stalls!
Posts: 44
 Wow!
Story of the Year on your FIRST story! Congratulations! It's an excellent story; well written, sexy to the point of pain, full of great imagery and you can spell ;) Can't wait for the next one. RRR @-,-
cabinboy
Posted: 2008/12/30 11:49  Updated: 2008/12/30 11:49
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2006/1/21
From: Great Britain
Posts: 4521
 Well done
Congrats on getting story of the year
Jonathan_Philips
Posted: 2008/12/18 10:48  Updated: 2008/12/18 10:48
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2006/2/3
From: London UK
Posts: 3012
 Wonderful!
Simply wonderful. Possibly the best written story I have read here. I will contact you privately about it in the not too distant future. You should feel very proud of yourself.
pickle_tickler
Posted: 2008/10/25 16:39  Updated: 2008/10/25 16:39
Virgin
Joined: 2008/5/4
From:
Posts: 3
 woah
wow loved it!! amazing story!!
jiaka1981
Posted: 2008/10/24 0:21  Updated: 2008/10/24 0:21
Virgin
Joined: 2008/7/6
From: AZ
Posts: 17
 first time's a charm
no critique needed. great plot, likable characters, you set the scene well. Some may question how quicky she got in his car, but i've done that, my experience wasnt as satisfing, i just got a number. great job keep em comming!
Yuck Fu
Posted: 2008/10/22 19:56  Updated: 2008/10/22 19:56
Up and Comer
Joined: 2008/6/23
From: Everywhere and Nowhere
Posts: 53
 Sticky Board
I just about cummed all over my key board. Nice work
angelic_l3itch
Posted: 2008/10/10 12:08  Updated: 2008/10/10 12:08
Bookworm
Joined: 2005/10/5
From: North Carolina
Posts: 134
 Absolutely Amazing
I know I dont come to LL often but when I do I simply love being blown away by some of the best..Keep up the good work and damn theres goes my concentration LOL!!
geobob
Posted: 2008/10/5 12:39  Updated: 2008/10/5 12:39
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2007/4/16
From: San Marcos, Tx
Posts: 253
 geobob
Lust,hot, beautifully descriptive. You are a natural.
unexpected
Posted: 2008/10/4 5:18  Updated: 2008/10/4 5:18
Virgin
Joined: 2008/1/29
From:
Posts: 2
 wow!
amazing for your first piece! cant wait to hear about more from this couple. so sexy and exciting!
buffy
Posted: 2008/10/3 0:25  Updated: 2008/10/3 0:25
Virgin
Joined: 2007/4/16
From:
Posts: 5
 Hot! Hot! Hot!
I loved it! So sensual and so sexual! More, please??!!! Buffy
Luv2
Posted: 2008/10/2 9:50  Updated: 2008/10/2 9:50
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2007/4/7
From: "HE'S BACK !!!" :)
Posts: 5319
 WOW .... Just WOW !
S... That was your FIRST story and you score the 'Story Of The Week?' Look out LL, we have a sexual hottie among us!! Luv2 gets out a few 'Handi-wipes' and a hand towel. I'll be in a dream world all day!! Thank's for rendering me useless for my work day! :) Write On my sweet! '3' from Luv2
Pearl1113
Posted: 2008/9/28 13:00  Updated: 2008/9/28 13:00
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/9/3
From:
Posts: 363
 awesome
very good for a first story...! way to go...! & i agree there should be a sequel...
yoursforever
Posted: 2008/9/24 13:02  Updated: 2008/9/24 13:02
Virgin
Joined: 2008/7/23
From:
Posts: 3
 hot!
that was an excellent first story.....waiting for the sequel too......
tail gunner
Posted: 2008/9/23 16:50  Updated: 2008/9/23 16:50
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/6/28
From: the great American southland
Posts: 1139
 first efforts ...
a story of the week on the very first effort ... way to go, girl !
Rotsen
Posted: 2008/9/23 12:50  Updated: 2008/9/23 12:50
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/7/29
From: Eastern PA
Posts: 619
 Impressive Sensual Accumen
Simply one of the most enjoyable stories I have read here on LL so far. Your descriptions of the depot, the surrounding location and the weather are unique, effective and entertaining. The sex too, while more conventionally presented, is a cut above and nicely effective. Bravo.
edlyneham
Posted: 2008/9/23 3:48  Updated: 2008/9/23 3:48
Bookworm
Joined: 2006/1/12
From: Perth, Scotland
Posts: 105
 Excellent...
tale and very well written with outstanding use of detail and colloquialism. This story really LIVES. Thanks, Ed
Tentativeness
Posted: 2008/9/23 3:46  Updated: 2008/9/23 3:46
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/5/20
From: In your hottest dreams(:
Posts: 237
 I find...
...that I agree with Tom. Your story was totally down to earth, and I questioned that fact, too. On the whole, however, I find that it derserves a 'blazing!' score. Good job(: <3 Lillian.
tom thumper
Posted: 2008/9/22 15:54  Updated: 2008/9/22 15:54
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2006/12/20
From: left coast of Canada
Posts: 259
 An Amazing First!
Wow this is an extremely hard story to criticize for improvement cause everything about it works so well. I really love your dialogue which sounds spot on. And you nail all the sensuous detail which makes for a rocking erotic story. Maybe I would quibble about why Anitchka would just hop in the car with a complete stranger. And that just struck me as odd cause the rest of the story felt so darn real. Can't wait for more.
stillpure
Posted: 2008/9/22 11:23  Updated: 2008/9/22 11:23
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/1/12
From: NY
Posts: 5919
 Wow
Nice work. Quite realistic. A sequal sounds great for it.
2yummy4u
Posted: 2008/9/22 6:45  Updated: 2008/9/22 6:45
Lusty Librarian's Pet
Joined: 2008/8/16
From: Within reach
Posts: 258
 Great Story
Very good story can't wait to read the next.
Amaryllis
Posted: 2008/9/22 6:20  Updated: 2008/9/22 6:21
Virgin
Joined: 2008/9/5
From: Here, There and Everywhere
Posts: 9
 That was so good ....
.... I need to lie down!
gal.savvy
Posted: 2008/9/22 6:06  Updated: 2008/9/22 6:06
Flirt
Joined: 2008/9/9
From:
Posts: 23
 WOW!!!!
dat was awesome....i hope there is a sequel...where they wud meet